Excedrin and prednisone

Flannery needs Excedrin Headache #357...

Courtship had more red flags pop up than in the annual running of the bulls, yet our put-upon protagonist can't hear the sound of the Mack truck bearing down on him, at full ramming speed.
Goodness, do all such folks have to be possessed of IQs lower than their age? How does this guy manage to dress himself?
Given all that family and friends dished out on him, I'm surprised that: (a) he hadn't been institutionalized; and (b) his revenge was so weak...poison ivy/oak for most folks, a few days of prednisone will handle that.

Ironic that I'm hopped up on prednisone & some antibiotics that I think are called Godzilla. I've got pneumonia gagantuosa, & lo & behold your story speaks to me. I love the sweet, gentleness of this story, how so many people show their concern & caring. The worst thing after a rape is the loneliness & I'm glad that wasn't part of the mix. You are a joy to read & a gifted writer. I'm moving on to the next installment, happily, because I have the company of a beloved writers stories to help me heal.

Kate and I want to thank AnotherChapter, ThatNewGuy and the other anonymous commentator for defending us so well. We will keep the anonymous comment down below on how our narrative was tedious and distracting, just as we keep most negative comments - but not all. Some are so damn offensive and have little, if any redeeming value.
Maybe the anonymous commentator misunderstood what we were saying when we wrote that we removed some of our earlier stories because the comments were too caustic. When comments call my wife a whore and physically threaten us or 'anyone who cheats', we think were feeding something dangerous. Our 'Jake's Tale' was a story that ended with the husband forgiving and reconciling with a wife who had an affair - too many of the comments could only be considered outlandish and evil. So, we removed the story.
Anon wrote, We know that someone asked for aspirin, but took Excedrin (with a capital E), three, instead of two. WTF? But you don't bother to tell us how much money the sucker sister pissed away to her addict brother, $200, $20,000? Yes, both were written on purpose. The use of naming Excedrin in the scene was to paint a vision for the reader's mind's eye. Something for the reader to help grasp visually the two people standing in the room trying to decide the best course of action. And we purposely didn't name the amount the sister gave her brother, although we did state it was all her funds, because we wanted the reader to question how much it could be (Hitchcock's McGuffin).
This past weekend the Wall Street Journal had an article explaining how many of the young girls putting their bodies on TikToK and other social media are having emotional issues because anonymous (or even friends) comment on any real or perceived flaws of those bodies. I guess we Literotica LW writers can relate. A story gets written in an effort to entertain and anyone with a terminal and keyboard can slam the writer because they don't like the plot, the outcome, etc. Pretty soon all there will be here is one or two decent writers and a whole lot of garbage. In other words, useful criticism is more than welcome, but keep the caustic comments to yourself.
Thanks to all who enjoyed 'Chuck and Sammi' and took the time to say so. All the best,
Bill

If you want to improve your writing and appeal to a wider audience then you should pay more attention to the negative comments that detail what is perceived as flaws and faults. If you don't really give a shit what people think then why bother to post stories, or delete comments, or do Anything in response to comments about which you couldn't care less? Just Plain Bob treats comments just like he treats his stories, puts them out there and let's others worry or care; he (or she?) don't.
The plot was great. The execution was tedious and distracting. We know that someone asked for aspirin, but took Excedrin (with a capital E), three, instead of two. WTF? But you don't bother to tell us how much money the sucker sister pissed away to her addict brother, $200, $20,000? Guess the medicine details were more important and significant? And the whole concept that this addicted morally corrupt brother would casually admit to all his crimes was preposterous. The asshole would have claimed he came by the house to talk to his brother in law and the brother in law attacked him, with a gun. Again, great plot, but very weak and illogical character portrayals. You might want to consider getting some objective review and editing. Anyway, thanks for the effort.

I met an Armenian girl who was, is, a friend of one of my daughters; petite little girl, long curly black hair, eyes so black they hypnotize. She's just lovely; all perky and saucy. She'll be my next heroine. I showed her this story and she was furious! She wanted to know what was going to happen to poor Poncho and Lefty.
The desert's quiet, Cleveland's cold, so the story ends we're told. Poncho needs your prayers it's true, but save a few for Lefty too. He only did what he had to do, and now he's growing old. (They played it on the radio...)
You guys are going to be sorry when Poncho's gone and you didn't give him one measly tip of the hat. That's thoughtless indifference to a national institution.
The story's still pretty good in a silly sort of way, but shouldn't the sun be up by now? There's going to be a lot of commuter traffic, and I bet a lot of people are double parked. Can't remember the name of the island in the Arctic where they think the last Mammoths lived. Save that damn pachyderm; I heard some nefarious Zambians were out to get his tusks.
These things should all be getting fives; for balls if nothing else. (Elephants have big balls)
Oh, oh I just felt a rush of blood to the head! The damn Prednisone is kicking in. By for now...